You%26#039;re probably still asleep at this time
I guess I%26#039;ll compose a brief rhyme
I%26#039;m standing by the Dfac
Waiting for dirty pans
Wishing I were with you
Holding your tiny hands
I see a little flower
On a funny looking tree
I think I%26#039;ll purchase one for you
As soon as I am free
What will I do when you are gone
Will someon take your place
Heck no. Just leave me a few pictures
Of your soft and pretty face
What do you think about this poem? I wrote it to my ex just before she got out of the Army.....?
UMM ITS CUTE BUT I DONT LIEK THE %26quot;WHAT WILL I DO WHEN YOU ARE GONE%26quot;..I DONT KNOW IT SOUNDS EERIE EVEN THOUGH I KNOW YOU MEAN WHEN SHE%26#039;S AWAY..BUT BECAUSE OF THE ARMY AND YA KNOW..IT JUST SOUNDS EERIE TO ME..EVERYTHING ELSE IS CUTE
Reply:I like it, it sounds good, but it does need a little work. Don%26#039;t take my word for it, though.
Reply:It is pretty good but try a little harder on the ending
Reply:eeehhh....it sounds like you just writing a letter. sorry
genealogy mormon
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